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2007. In many works of literature, past events can
affect, positively or negatively, the present activities, attitudes, or values
of a character. Choose a novel or play in which a character must contend with
some aspect of the past, either personal or societal. Then write an essay in
which you show how the character's relationship to the past contributes to the
meaning of the work as a whole.
In Edward Albee’s The American Dream, the Young Man must cope with the brutal mutilation of his twin brother 20 years ago. This event leaves him a shell of what he appears, devoid of desire and passion, literally unable to feel due to the actions of Mommy. He loses all internal elements of what makes someone a person, having a sort of empty inside while his appearance makes him seem perfect. Through the relationship of the Young Man to his past, Albee emphasizes the condemnation of the "American Dream" and its influence on society that are the focus of the work as a whole.
When the Young Man was just a child, he had
a twin brother who lived at an adoption center with him. Grandma reveals that
Mommy and Daddy “bought” this twin brother, but they grew dissatisfied with it
and accordingly they got rid of him, but not before punishing him through
physical abuse. When he wouldn’t show Mommy the love she wanted, she gouged out
his eyes, just one of many body parts that were cut off. Every time a part of
the twin was cut off, the Young Man lost feeling in that area, and as a grown up
man he cannot feel anything but passively lets others love him and enjoy the
perfect image that they see in his appearance. This is how the mutilation causes
the Young Man’s present to be different.
Another aspect of the adopted baby that is
very important to mention is that in the story, he is always referred to as an
object without gender. He is called a “bumble,” and referred to as “the bumble”
or “it.” This has huge significance for the meaning of the play. A baby, usually
a symbol of innocence and love, is turned into a commodity and used as a means
for Mommy and Daddy to experience pleasure. By doing this, Albee is warning that
we shouldn’t treat people like objects that we can use to fulfill our desires
and then discard when they no longer serve that purpose. Relationships between
parents and a child should not be about the best interests of the child or the
adult, but about love between the two, and the materialism of modern society has
threatened this.
The way the Albee chooses to address the
American Dream is also through the use of the Young Man and his twin brother.
The Young Man is called “the American Dream” by Grandma three times, and he
represents the “new” American Dream as people saw it in Albee’s time. The new
American Dream values things like money and the ability to earn it, as the Young
Man shows when he is very interested in all things related to money. It doesn’t
place any value on empathy or any sort of feeling at all, but instead allows
people to love it and attribute whatever they want to it. The old American
Dream, represented by Grandma, is willingly replaced by the new one before the
end of the play. There is a stark contrast between the two: the Young Man’s
appearance is flawless, and on the outside he contains all of the qualities that
people see as positive. Grandma, on the other hand, is old, wise, and has many
positive qualities on the inside that aren’t shown by her appearance. It isn’t
even possible to tell if she is a man or a woman, as she implies that she really
isn’t either, but possesses qualities of both. The new American Dream certainly
seems better, and after everyone meets the Young Man their thoughts about
Grandma are completely forgotten and replaced by this new American Dream.
In his character the Young Man, Albee
created a mechanism through which he could convey his thoughts on the old versus
new American Dreams, and also how the materialism in society was wrong and could
lead to very disconcerting situations.
I think you did a really nice job with this prompt revision! I really liked how your intro paragraph was really detailed, so the reader knows what to expect in the essay, and then it was followed with a thesis at the end of the paragraph. This is a really good play to write about for this specific prompt, and you did a really nice job of getting all of the necessary details in there, but not overdoing it. One thing that I suggest doing is in your second paragraph, it seems like you're just stating what happened in the play, so I would try adding some more about how this effects the play as a whole and how this mutilation causes the Young Man’s present to be different. Another thing I would do to the essay is splitting up the fourth paragraph, so you have a conclusion paragraph to wrap things up. The big chunk in the middle makes it hard for the reader to sort through the ideas, so splitting that up would make it easier to get the point across. Other than that, good job!
ReplyDeleteYour introductory paragraph and thesis statement are both clear and concise. I really like your sentence that "Relationships between parents and a child should not be about the best interests of the child...", the insight and tying-in to the thesis helps keep the reader on track.
ReplyDeleteHowever, I'm not sure how your third paragraph applies to the prompt of the "character's relationship to the past". In this paragraph, you discuss the foil of Grandma and the Young Man and the New versus Old American Dream, which is good to analyze, but it is not relevant.
But overall, you did a very good job revising.
Chris, I think this is a very interesting and well organized post! You start it off strong with a good introduction paragraph. You also follow the prompt and give good details supporting your thesis. I like when you said " through the relationship of the young man with his past Albee emphasizes the condemnation of the "American Dream" and its influence on society that are the focus of the work as a whole." I thought this was a very interesting thought! I do have to say that the second paragraph does a lot of summarizing of the plot. I agree with Daphine that the last paragraph gets off topic from the prompt a little. It would have been better if you added a paragraph to summarize your point.
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